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What do you think of this poem about sleep? - rusted_gut - 11-09-2012 07:55 PM
I wrote this short poem about my delayed sleep phase syndrome, how I can only live alone in the endless night. Started as a facebook status actually but couldn't help making it rhyhme
O how the birds sing,
when I close my eyes to dream.
O how the first light,
goes by unnoticed in my night.
O my midnight garden,
here only time has pardon.
Abandoned by the sun,
still what a pleasant prison it has become.
- Jazz :D - 11-09-2012 08:03 PM
Aww I like it! Especially the second stanza. Good job!
- JH - 11-09-2012 08:03 PM
me too!
the last two lines make it.
- Aarif Ameen - 11-09-2012 08:03 PM
it good work
i may give you 8/9
go on writing dear
Can you answer this one please?
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