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Edit my college essay please!?
11-27-2012, 06:37 AM
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I would fix the first sentence

"I believe everyone can make a difference. I highly dislike when I hear my peers saying"

to

"I believe everyone can make a difference. I highly dislike it when I hear my peers saying"
or
"I believe everyone can make a difference. I highly dislike the fact that I hear my peers saying "
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[] - Kaitlyn - 11-27-2012, 06:37 AM
[] - Cookie n Cream - 11-27-2012 06:37 AM

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