New concept what do you think?

[Pamela K]

sounds very good.

i like your writing. when i clicked on your story it did not seem to be the same as it was on here. I had no idea what you were talking about at first. i was confused for a long while as you kept going from Rich and Kian to some very long descriptions. Be mindful of that, as well as a few grammar and punctuation problems.

i would have commented on there or voted but i do not have facebook or twitter and i never will.

keep up the good work you are very creative and talented. thank you for sharing i hope you get published soon as i really want to read this