ROTC personal statement , please review?

[Bromine]

It is elaborate and has poise. Great job so far. However, I did not see "leadership" at all. You have to expand words on your leadership potential. The current generation of army officers need to be adaptive and creative leaders, and most of all, motivational and inspiring. The Army ROTC program credits itself as the best leadership course in the nation.

As you may know, scholarship slots are dwindling as we speak, due to downsizing. You have to stand out and be different, work harder, and lead better. Remember that when you turn this statement in, go in for your interview. sign your contract, and all throughout cadet-land.

Best of wishes, HOOAH.