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Can someone please check my English writing?
04-08-2014, 06:30 PM
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Can someone please check my English writing?
In February 2010, a mere six yearsafter its initial launch in 2004, Facebook reached over 400 million active users on the site.
Clearly, Facebook is an integral part of many people’s lives. So much ao, in face, that many people cannot fathom life without it.

These days Facebook is not only available on personal computers, but also through most mobile devices like cellphones, iphones ect.
The habit of logging on Facebook has blinded most of its users, cancelling their awareness of the negative effects of using it.
First of all, Facebook endangerous your privacy. Facebook it is in the public domain and there will be people who will be viewing your profile- not only your friends and family could know what is happening in your life, but also strangers that can use your information against you or for their own benefits.

The users of Facebook are not safe, this social networking site is harmful for one’s privacy and expose your personal information such as relation status and social contacts to the general public.
In addition, Facebook results addiction- people are counstantly logged on it, because it is veachable and they can use it almost everywhere.

People wake up early in the morning and run to their computers in erder to check up on any new notifications ar status updates their friends had made.
They don’t bother leaving their houses and make new friends, spend time with their families, or keep in touch with the outside world.
The addiction can stars from an early age, which makes a large decrease in real-life social interacting.

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I was trying to do my best with it, but unfortunately I'm not a native speaker, so if there is anything you think to add\change, in order to improve the paper - feel free.
Thanks in advance! (:

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Can someone please check my English writing? - Tyngdlos. - 04-08-2014 06:30 PM
[] - l♥ve - 04-08-2014, 06:34 PM
[] - Dude. - 04-08-2014, 06:39 PM
[] - steven m - 04-08-2014, 06:46 PM

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