(Writers) Do you like this short paragraph?

[Charz XD]

haven't you already posted this? maybe it's just me.

I like it! it's really short but it's good. My favourite paragraph is the first one.

Edit: sorry,, i wasn't thinking. It was stupid to rewrite a piece of your writing. I agree that strong verbs can be much more affective than adverbs and too much detail IS sometimes boring, depending on whether you prefer to leave the scene to your imagination or whether you like everything explained to you so you can picture it perfectly.

I think it could still be improved and maybe you could create a little more imagery but now that i see your writing style, i take back my comments beforehand. Sorry!