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Caring for children is an important thing of the society. It is suggested that all mothers and fathers should be required to take childcare training courses.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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In any nation, childcare is always a noticeable issue. It is recommended that parents need to participate in courses which train them how to take care of their children. I personally agree with this suggestion.

First of all, caring for children is mentioned in terms of not only for their physical health but also their mental life. Many parents admit that they are confused about how to approach their kids when they grow up and become more mature. Hence, childcare is a complicated work and training courses are necessary. There, fathers and mothers learn the right skills and suitable methods to look after their kids from the very first years of life. For example, taking part in baby nursing class, a woman is taught the adequate diet to feed her daughter. In another course, a man is given advice to connect to his son in time of his puberty. These knowledges sound simply but not every parent is able to “practise” them well without learning.

Secondly, most people care for their offspring based on their own experiences, in which some are from their parents. However, in the society today, lots of things have changed, including the way children are taken care. Thus, some of the experiences are backward thinking and disadvantageous. For instance, in Vietnam, many of the old ask their daughters to discard colostrum before breastfeeding. Nevertheless, according to scientists, the first milk is the most nutritious for an infant. If this mother has taken a childcare training class, she can know what is good for her kid.

To conclude, childcare training courses which bring to parents knowledge to nurture their children are beneficial. I strongly believe all fathers and mothers should take part in these courses.

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WOW great job you put a lot of thought into that..ok just a few things

I would change...all the kid (s) to children or child

I would write parent education..parent workshops..where parents can not only learn new techniques to parenting but assist new parents with such issues as brain development and feeding nutrition child care in the early years and later such topics as..puberty, social media and use, as well as appropriate dating and college bond children. "empty nest"

second paragraph...I would stick to American culture that is too much of a swing..from one culture to another...for instances, Maybe a family has generations of living off government assistances, lack proper nutrition and health issues, through parent education one could break the cycle and be educated about proper nutrition, health care and even return to school for a degree to be able to support themselves and family breaking the cycle of government assistance

in conclusion, parent education could benefit everyone involved and happy children grow happy and healthy and have less issues into adulthood.

ok this was fun email me anytime happy to help.

last line first paragraph..."practice"...although I know spell check would grab that