English speaking problem?

[Peer]

Please tell me is it write or wrong:


'If you will try to find me in 'Market' you will always find me on 'Book Shops'
but if you will try to find me at my home ,you will find me 'sitting and my stare will be on my mobile phone,and i would be suffering Facebook'

[Emily]

If i was to change that to be more understandable i'd say:

If you were to search for me while I'm at the Market, then you would find me at the Book Store.
But if you search for me while I'm at home, then you'll find me sitting while i stare at my mobile phone, surfing facebook.

[Mark]

WILL is not allowed inside an IF clause, even though we are talking about the future, present tense is required for formal English. The THEN clause, when the IF is in the present tense, MUST use WILL, for formal English (WOULD is only okay in the THEN clause when the IF clause is in the past tense).

If you try to find me..., you will always find me...., but if you try to find...you will find me sitting while I stare at my mobile phone, enduring Facebook (enduring if you wish to imply Facebook is unpleasant for you, surfing or doing or using Facebook if you do not wish to express any feelings or attitudes about it).