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[Lalo12]

if you have to add or remove some words

One of the challenges that the radio might face in the future is whether it will continue to have success as it currently has. Since technology is advancing there might be some concern whether radio stations might be in less use. Yes radio stations can stop been heard less and less but with music still existing it would never stop been a reason for users to stop hearing the radio station, yes it might decline because not everything stays popular forever. Radio waves will always be used for satellite radios or for navigating maps so for a fact we know radio waves would be used. There is always that if but I personally do think that it won’t get worse but it can be decline.

Internet started out in the 1960’s when the first signal or message was sent over the Arpanet from a computer science laboratory at University of California, Los Angeles (UCLA 1960’s, where a group call the Network Working Group (NWG) form a meeting and soon after they created the internet. Throughout the first years the internet was invented it barely used by anyone only scientist would mainly use it. It was then through the 90’s that internet started to evolved, but since many of the people had difficult using a computer it was harder for many to access the internet. In the 2000’s that’s when the internet evolved completely as many social networking sites went up.


The internet has played a tremendous deal in the media in which people can do everything online starting from sending emails to school, work, colleges, or communicating with other people online. In the internet there is a lot of advertising; in fact, on any website you visit online, you can see advertisements. Some of the advertisement I have seen online are match.com, Pepsi, and subway. This advertisement usually do work because when I’m on espn.com I usually see this advertisement and they make me hungry and I get tempted to go and buy it. With the use of the internet we can print paper, watch movies online, send pictures attach in emails, and etc. Watching movies online is really great for everyone, so you don’t have to go out and rent movies on a rainy day when you can just watch or rent a movie online. I’m a currently Netflix subscriber, so I get to watch TV shows online or movies that they have. Other websites where you can watch videos or trailers is YouTube which is widely known around the world.

[Papayatree]

One of the challenges that the radio might face in the future is whether it will continue to maintain its great success in society. Since technology is advancing, there might be some concern over whether radio stations might be in less use. Yes, some radio stations are being listened to less and less, but with music still existing, it will never stop being a valid reason for users to stop tuning into other radio stations; and yes, it might decline because not everything stays popular forever. ?
Radio waves will always be used for satellite radios or for navigating maps so, for a fact, we know that radio waves would still be used. Personally, I think that it won’t get worse but it may slightly decline.

Internet started out in the 1960’s when the first signal (or message) was sent over the Arpanet from a computer science laboratory at the University of California, Los Angeles (UCLA 1960’s). A group called the Network Working Group (NWG) formed a meeting and, soon after, created the internet. During the first years of the internet, it was barely used by anyone - mainly scientists made use of it. It was then through the 90’s that internet started to evolve; but since many of the people had difficulty using the computer, it was harder for many to access the internet. In the 2000’s the internet evolved completely as many social networking sites went up.


The internet has played a tremendous part in the media in which people can do everything online- from sending emails to school, work, colleges, or communicating with other people. On the internet there is a lot of advertising; in fact, on any website you visit online, you can see advertisements. Some of the advertisements I have seen online are 'match.com', Pepsi, and Subway. These advertisements usually do work because when I’m on 'espn.com' I usually come across them and get tempted to go and buy the products. With the use of the internet, we can print paper, watch movies online, send pictures (attached in emails), etc. Watching movies online is really great for everyone, as you don’t have to go out and rent movies on a rainy day - you can just watch or rent a movie online. I’m currently a Netflix subscriber, so I get to watch TV shows or movies online. Another website where you can watch videos or trailers is YouTube which is widely known around the world.

[S is the name]

One of the challenges that the radio might face in the future is whether it will continue to have the same degree of succession as it currently does. Since technology is advancing there might be some concern on whether radio stations may not be as used as they had been, a few years back. Of course, the amount of people that listen to radio stations were not as many as there has been, but because people of almost every generation still listen to music, there would always be a certain number of people that still listen to radio stations. The number may decline because not everything stays popular forever. However radio stations are still used for satellite radios or for navigating maps, so we know for a fact that radio stations would still be used. In my personal opinion, I do not believe that the number would stoop to a very low number, but it may decline in a few years.

The Internet was officially invented in the 1960’s, when the first signal or message was sent over the Arpanet from a computer science laboratory at University of California, Los Angeles (UCLA 1960’s, where a group called the Network Working Group or 'NWG' formed a meeting after they created the internet.) In the first few years prior to invention that the internet was invented, it was barely used by anybody except for scientists who would mainly use it for experimental purposes. It was around the 1990’s when the Internet became immensely popular, but since many people had difficulty using a computer, it was hard for them to access the internet. It was only in the 2000’s when the internet evolved completely, as the popularity of many social networking sites went upwards.


The internet has played a tremendous part in the media, where people can do everything online starting from sending emails to school, work, colleges, or communication with other people online. On the internet there is a lot of advertising; in fact, on almost any website you visit online, you can see advertisements on the sidebars. Some of the advertisements I have seen on my visits to various websites are for specific well-known companies, brands, and even other websites. In my opinion I think those advertisments work, because when I’m on certain websites, if I see advertisments related to food,they make me hungry and I get tempted to go out and buy the company's advertised food. With the use of the internet we can watch movies online, and send pictures attach in emails. Those are just only a few examples out of hundreds if not thousands! Watching movies online is fun for everyone, because it saves you the hassle of going out and wasting time renting movies at video or DVD stores. I personally am a subscriber to a website that offers those services, so I get to watch TV shows online or movies that I don't have access to on my satellite dish. There are many well known websites that allow you to watch videos such as YouTube.

[Buzzy]

Hi Lalo12,

One of the challenges radio might face in the future is whether it will continue to enjoy its current success. Since technology is advancing, radio stations might be in less use. However, as long as music exists, radio would never stop tuning in to radio stations. Yes, listener ship might decline because not everything stays popular forever. Even so, radio waves will always be used for satellite radios or navigating maps. ***Personally I think that it won’t get worse but it can be decline. (***not a logical argument)

Internet started out in the 1960’s when the first signal or message was sent over the Arpanet from a computer science laboratory at University of California, Los Angeles (UCLA 1960’s). A group call the Network Working Group (NWG) formed a meeting and soon after, they created the internet. Throughout the first years the internet it was barely used except by scientists. Then, through the 1990’s the internet started to evolve but difficulties with computers made it hard to access the internet. In the 2000’s, the internet gained popularity when social networking sites went up.


The internet has played a tremendous role in the media, allowing people to do everything online such as sending emails to school, work, colleges, or communicating with others online. Throughout the internet, there are advertisements. Almost any website you visit, you can see advertisements. Some of the advertisements I have seen online are match.com, Pepsi, and Subway. Advertisements work because when I’m on ESPN.com they make me hungry and I get tempted. With the use of the internet, we can print paper, watch movies online, send picture attachments in emails, and etc. Watching movies online is really great for everyone, because we don’t have to go out and rent movies on a rainy day. We can just watch or rent a movie online. I’m a Netflix subscriber, so I get to watch TV shows online or movies in their selection. Another website where you can watch videos or trailers is YouTube which is widely known around the world.

Hope this helps. Email me if you have any questions. The last paragraph does not flow properly, just so you know.

[D]

One of the challenges that radio might face in the future is whether or not it will continue to be as successful as it currently is. Since technology advances so quickly there may be concern about the sustainability of radio stations. Radio stations could possibly become less popular but with music still existing and being created they would still be needed as that is a major reason users listen to radio. Another reason the number of listeners may decline is because not everything stays popular forever. Radio waves will always be used for satellite radio or for navigating maps so they will not completely disappear. [Are you sure this is true? Do GPS and satellite radio use radio waves/frequencies? I'm not sure but I would research this] Because of the things I have mentioned I personally don't think that radio consumership will lessen but it could decline.

The internet began in the 1960’s when the first signal or message was sent over the Arpanet. This was done by a group named the Network Working Group (NWG) from a computer science laboratory at the University of California, Los Angeles, after a meeting. Shortly following this event they created the internet. For the first years after the internet's invention, it was barely used by anyone except for scientists. The 1990's were when the internet started to evolve, but because many people had trouble using a computer correctly it was more difficult for them to access. The 2000’s were when internet usage became more mainstream as many social networking sites went up.


The internet has had tremendous growth because people can do everything online, from sending emails to using it for various things at work and college. The internet has a lot of marketing, any website you visit contains advertisements. Some of the advertisements I have seen online are match.com, Pepsi, and Subway. I feel the advertisements work well, sometimes when I’m on espn.com I see them, get hungry, and am tempted to buy whatever they are selling. Due to the internet we can print paper [Huh? Doesn't a printer print paper? You can print things from a computer without being online. The internet does not "make" paper, factories do.], watch movies, send pictures as attachments in emails, etc. Accessing movies online is great for everyone, as you do not have to go out and rent movies on a rainy day, you can simply watch and/or purchase a movie from a website. I am a Netflix subscriber, so I get to watch television shows or movies that they have online. Another website you can watch videos or trailers on is YouTube, which is widely known around the world.

This is a brief edit I did, there are other problems with this paper I do not have time to deal with though. Some of the formatting and structure is off. Also, what is the subject of this writing? Radio or internet? From the question you posed it seems this may be an excerpt from a larger paper, if that is true it may work better. Just some advice, I changed many words because you should avoid using the same ones in a paragraph (unless they are proper nouns you have to use or there are no synonyms for that particular word) and certainly in a sentence. Unless this is just something you quickly wrote and didn't properly edit yourself, I would advise you get some help with your writing. The grammar and spelling need a lot of work.