What do you think of these BARS?

[alex r]

the way im rippin' it I should have gone on tour (tore)
you all knew clear (nuclear) im the bomb that's what im blowin' up for
see y'all gotta keep up with my bars, my bars clever
right now y'all behind my bars y'all bartenders
you must need a TIP (T.I.) I'll give you one ASAP
its a reason why they bumpin' my features like Craig Mack
you don't trust your shorty around me, boy where's your faith at
her ass puffy now she bad boy ima take that
what you see is what you get when I spray gats
its not a doorag there's no strings attached when i wavecaps (wave caps)
I give better hygiene than a dentist when blow them things
if you flossin' I reach (toothbrush) for the scope (mouthwash) and aim (toothpaste)
see I send a message through the pen (penn) BMM me
now i've never been a follower so you can't DM me (twitter)
all im seen is little punch rhyme dude runnin' around with my style
it's getting old people, bingo
all im seein' is a whole lot of copies, kinkos
but im the one that's buzzin' like a bumblebee
im the teacher my pupil C (see) average students that just wannabe

[Shadow_of_the_sun]

Some of it's good. Not exactly my style though. Some of it just straight doesn't make sense or is weak as f*ck.

The flossin line does not make sense. No one would think that means toothbrush and mouthwash. I don't know what BMM is. And i don't know what DM is. So maybe they make sense, but to me they don't. Some lines like the 2nd and 3rd to last are straight corny.

[R-Jay]

pretty good. continue to explain your bars as you do as some ppl may have trouble comprehending what your saying

[Sean]

It was terrible. I'm just being honest so don't get mad. You sound kinda egotistical. Don't rap about sex, drugs, or violence. It's been done to death and it is so generic. Make songs with substance and meaning and don't do that "hashtag" style of rap that Drake and Nicki Minaj does. The one where you say a whole sentence and then say a word that associates with it like you did with the "bingo" and "kinkos" lines. Those are hashtag lines and you see it everywhere now. Have a Merry Christmas.

[David]

I agree with Sean. Rap is supposed to tell a story and have meaning in it. Yours has zero meaning

[Da]

some lines are good some are wack....but the line with the bars and bartenders i must say it is clever