What do you think of my story so far?

[sugar cookies]

Here it is, criticism is very much appreciated.

I remember that day perfectly.

I flung open the white wooden door to my spotless room and tossed my dirty duffel bag onto the pure white carpeting, extremely grateful to be home and not caring about any mess I made. After a week in the woods on vacation with my family, it was great to be back to air conditioning, electricity, and most of all, the Internet.

I quickly pulled my dirty blonde hair back into a messy ponytail and collapsed onto my cushy bed, taking a moment to relax before flipping open the black laptop that was fully charged and waiting on my nicely made bed for me to use it.

I quickly started up the computer and Twitter, Facebook, Google+, Keek, YouTube, and several other social networking sites began to open in separate tabs while I grabbed my iPhone off of my dresser to check out my favorite apps: Kik and Instagram.

There were no new Kik messages for me to reply to on my phone, and I'd only gained a few more Instagram followers over the week I was gone, so I set my phone aside and returned to my laptop with all the necessary tabs open.

Little to my surprise, there was nothing new to look at on Google+. Nothing ever seemed to happen on that network, and I was considering deleting my account if things didn't pick up soon. On Facebook I'd gotten several hundred new "likes" which seemed strange as I hadn't posted anything for almost two weeks. I didn't think much of it and switched over to Keek. 

One thousand followers?

But just at the beginning of that week, I'd only had five hundred! I could tell something was up. I scrolled through all of my keeks, but they all seemed to have the same number of views and comments, so one keek didn't seem to be the source of my new followers.

I changed tabs and logged into Twitter under the username @drew_char . The number of followers there had doubled too, for no apparent reason! What was going on?

Last, but not least, I logged into my YouTube account and gasped loudly once the page had loaded completely.

My account had one hundred thousand subscribers, and my only existing video had over one million views.

I was so shocked, I forgot to breathe for a moment. Once the reflex came back to me, I began screaming and jumping around my room excitedly, never so happy in my life.

[Moe]

You should copyright your material for around 40$ so no one can steal it

[Biscuit]

its pretty good so far. after that you should explain how she got famous by someone taking a video of her pooping in the woods while she was out camping and then they posted it to Youtube and somebody made a dubstep remix of it and people went crazy over how amazing it was