How can i write these sentences in much better way?

[Mikaal]

If any one wants a rich, handsome and energetic roommate then follow Brad pit on twitter and you might can get lucky but if any one of you or u know any one who is looking for decent roommate then please message me details in inbox....Looking fwd for it..
Is there any grammatical mistake in it?? if yes then please let me know
Is there any grammatical mistake in it?? if yes then please let me know

[oikoσ]

"If anyone wants a rich, handsome, and energetic roommate, follow Brad Pitt on Twitter; you might get lucky. However, if anyone of you is looking for a decent roommate or know someone who is, please . . . ."

[H]

I'm not sure that putting yourself down is the best way to entice someone into looking at your profile. Since you wanted someone to edit the existing content, I'll do it, but if you'd like something a little more original that isn't going to scare people away, add some "additional details" with a few words you'd use you describe yourself and I'll edit my answer to reflect that. Now, having said that:

You could follow Brad Pitt on Twitter in hopes of having the perfect roommate who has good looks, ridiculous amounts of energy, and deep pockets or you could connect with a decent, kind hearted, down to earth individual like me. For more information, please feel free to message me anytime. Looking forward to getting to know you.

Updated: I just saw your additional details. Yes, you do have some errors in it. Here's your original sentence corrected for grammar issues:

If any one wants a rich, handsome and energetic roommate then follow Brad pit on twitter and you might can get lucky but if any one of you or u know any one who is looking for decent roommate then please message me details in inbox....Looking fwd for it..

If anyone wants a rich, handsome, and energetic roommate then follow Brad Pitt on Twitter and might get lucky but if you or anyone you know is looking for a decent roomate, please message details to my inbox. Looking forward to it.

I'll be honest, your choices in words probably aren't going to articulate the kind of message you asked for but since you simply wanted someone to correct any potential issues, there you go.