ATTENTION HIP HOP, R&B AND RAP FANS. Im a young guy with rap aspirations and i need constructive feedback..?

[RIcky]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EGG1zImFiec

This is a freestyle track i did back in september and decided to even experiment and put together a little home-video for it (did what i could), hopefully ya'll enjoy it and what im talking about, if you do be sure to hit me up on twitter @rickybenang and facebook: ricky benang. thanks guys

[George III]

HipHop will put you in jail for selling drugs

[Holly]

just seen it , v -good loved the beat , rhythm , and background music
i get the meaning from the lyrics
amazing you should try out more XD !

[Gemma]

Dope sound. You got talent, I'll give you a s/o on twitter ( @lucystanyer ) do t know if it will help thou :-)

[Ben]

your original but need to stick with one thing, i thought you were just saying things to rhyme my friend answered this for me i dont know anything about rap

[Broadway]

Overall, out of 10 I would give it an 8. Your flow is good, the way you also speed up your syllables at certain points builds up the excitement in the song. Your lyrics are strong however may need some polishing up. Just a little tip in future, try do these so called 'shout outs' in your songs, it makes it seem un professional like a lot of UK artists. However I know you did not do so in this track so i give you props. It is a good track overall though.