PROFESSIONAL JOB RECRUITERS PLEASE CRITIQUE MY RESUME.?

[Dong N]

Please critique my resume. Anything will help.


John Smith
78 XYZ Avenue (123)456-7891
San Francisco, CA 94124

Career Summary
Seeking an entry level Marketing position which will enable me to apply my educational background and work experience to the growing success of the company

EDUCATION
B.A. in Business Management Economics, June 2009
University of XYZ, XYZ

PROFESSIONAL SKILLS
 Proficient in Excel 2007, Word 2007 and Photoshop CS3
 In-depth knowledge of marketing concepts and strategies through relevant marketing course work
 Creative and able to identify current trends for marketing and advertisement
 Excellent written and oral communication skills
 Ability to multi-task and adapt to fast paced environments
 Work well independently or in a team-setting

EXPERIENCE
(07/07 – present) Freelance Marketing Consultant, Self-employed, San Francisco, CA
• Design business cards, promotional flyers and price lists for family-owned and operated salon business
• Maintain updated content and images for website
• Review online customer feedback and escalate issues to management for salon improvements

(04/09 – 06/09) Marketing Intern, Barrios Unidos, City, CA
• Designed the company’s official business card and promotional flyers for advertisement
• Researched new leads through the Internet
• Performed email marketing functions through creation of email ads and sending emails to prospective clients

(09/05 – 06/09)
Computer Consultant
Instructional Computing,
City, CA
• Researched and troubleshot complex application issues
• Provided one-on-one application training for lab students
• Assisted students in computer setup and logins
• Enforced lab rules and regulations to ensure equipment operability and cleanliness
• Safeguarded equipment against student vandalism and/or theft
• Escalated non-functional hardware issues to management
• Maintained and order lab supply and computer hardware inventory

(07/08 – 09/08)
Sales Cashier,
IMPARK Parking
City, CA
• Collected parking fees from SF Giants staff and affiliate partners
• Maintained high customer experience and satisfaction through providing a professional and positive demeanor at all times
• Collaborated and worked efficiently with peers and Area Managers to reduce long customer wait-time and traffic during parking peak hours

(07/07 – 12/07)
Sales Associate
Banana Republic
City, CA
• Ensure that each customer receives outstanding service by providing a friendly environment, which includes greeting and acknowledging every customer, maintaining solid product knowledge and all other aspects of customer service.
• Maintain an awareness of all promotions and advertisements.
• Performed inventory checks to assist customers in locating merchandise from various retail locations
• Communicate customer requests to management.
• Assist in completing price changes within the department.
• Complete customer transactions at register for merchandise sales

ACTIVITIES
Leadership
05/2006 – 06/2009
Vice President and Publicity, Psi Pi Alpha, City, CA

• Responsible for outreaching and maintaining good relations with other college fraternities and sororities
• Promoted and publicized the organization and its events through creating flyers and t-shirts using Photoshop as well as using online social networks such as, Facebook, Myspace, Twitter and the organization’s website
• Organized an on-campus event for Bone Marrow Drives for the Asian American Donor Program

04/2007 - 06/2009
Publicity Chairman and Core Member
Vietnamese Student Association
City, CA

• Promoted and managed all aspect of public relations for the organization
• Raised funds through design and creation of organization’s official t-shirt


Extracurricular Activities
Santa Barbara Senior Center
Habitat for Humanity
Breast cancer awareness marathon

Reference Available Upon Request

[Hire Me 101]

As a hiring expert, I recommend you take out your bottom two jobs as they were pretty short and you want to look like you've had stable jobs. The first three are fine. And a few more job descriptions. 3 may be too short. Have 4-6 job descriptions.

You should rename your activities section as "Other Experience" and name your regular experience section as "Professional Experience". Take out "References Available Upon Request" because you should already have your references on hand when meeting an employer.

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