can some help me with changing this to different words?

[Zoon Uae]

Social networking can bring competitive advantages to a business, including real-time sharing of information and analysis, better collaboration, and an enriched relationship with customers. It can also make employees feel valued, connected, and an important part of the community.
Yet the hazards are simply too dangerous to ignore. Network attacks, data leakage and theft, reputational damage, and compliance issues are risks that a business must address before it adopts social networking or allows wholesale access to social media sites through its network.

[Holly]

It's good, just as it is.

[Byron Cisneros]

give me a few hours