What do you think of my short rap?

[Ciaran Sinclaire]

always see people walking round with frowns on their face
This world is full of drugs and viloence
And We all gettin judged by our race
This world has to pick up the slate and step up to the plate
Everynight I'm watching the news,its a fucking desrace
Young people in hospital,shot or killed
This world will shorly come to an end
Some ppl give up and take bottle ful of pills
MAKE A CHANGE go on twitter and make it trend
call everybody your friend
cause when it does come to an end
love will take 1st and win
hate will take the bait ,get caught on hook
we cant look back, start something new
you know what its like to be stuck in his shoes
don't let him loose
help a brother out
scream and shout until everybody understand this without a doubt
Love your eminems and keep them close
Keep em as close as you can ,right under your nose

Also follow me on twitter @LittleBoyCiaran

[Jared Memorable]

why dont you record it??

[whisperingbaseball619]

u have enough followers

[Forrest Pruskauer]

good words and meaning but not a very creative ryhme scheme.