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Is my poem good could it be published?
04-29-2013, 02:28 AM
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Not bad, but it comes across as a series of political statements and slogans, rather than a coherent poem. Some of the rhymes (will/Thrill) are forced, others (again/Repent, lie/time) are slant rhymes without a reason for the shift.
Technically, it's poor, with the rhyme problem and the great variation in line length (again for no discernible reason).
Perhaps your skill lies in the writing of manifestos.

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