do you think this sentence/grammar is correct? (for speech presentation year-10)?

[Laila]

"are we ought to allow this to continue? i think not"
-Should we allow this to continue? I think not.
-Ought we allow this to continue? I think not.

"once again, another social media issue had ascend into the cyber-world."
-Once again, another social media issue has ascended into the cyber-world.

"but what started as fun had turned into funeral as a result of the demise of the 5 young people"

But what had started out as hours of fun, had turned into hours of unbearable funerals, as a result of the demise of the 5 young people.

or instead of 'as a result of the demise of the 5 young people' you could have 'due to the passing of the 5 young people' both make sense.

Hope this helps