Does my prologue draw you in?

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Be careful of tense and make more sense of the timeline.

Edit. For instance "make a sandwich for myself" could be edited to "make a sandwich."

Use logic. Would you really finish a sandwich and decide to take a nap after someone was peeking in your window? And was there really someone there? Make it obvious if there was.

I like the story a lot. But walk yourself through it as if you're really living it, and edit out the parts that are illogical and irrelevant to the story.

PS, you're welcome! Trust yourself and write write write!

Start with a more emphatic statement of character. "I may be a very realistic and pragmatic person, but something happened on winter break that changed all that." In other words, set your readers up for the rest of the story.