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What do you think of this poem about sleep?
11-09-2012, 07:55 PM
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What do you think of this poem about sleep?
I wrote this short poem about my delayed sleep phase syndrome, how I can only live alone in the endless night. Started as a facebook status actually but couldn't help making it rhyhme

O how the birds sing,
when I close my eyes to dream.
O how the first light,
goes by unnoticed in my night.
O my midnight garden,
here only time has pardon.

Abandoned by the sun,
still what a pleasant prison it has become.
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11-09-2012, 08:03 PM
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Aww I like it! Especially the second stanza. Good job! Smile
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11-09-2012, 08:03 PM
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me too!

the last two lines make it.
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11-09-2012, 08:03 PM
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it good work
i may give you 8/9
go on writing dear

Can you answer this one please?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?...309AAnQelX
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