Do you think the message of this poem is good?
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10-14-2012, 12:19 PM
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Do you think the message of this poem is good?
So this is my friend's first poem on her personal experiences. It is about a darker skinned girl growing up in an area surrounded by lighter people. As she grows up she starts to realise that in society lighter skin is viewed as better. This hurts her and destroys her self esteem. The 'chemicals' refers to bleaching products so she can make her skin lighter. Bleaching is known to burn the skin but the pain of the skin burning is better than the pain of living with very dark skin.
She runs free on the fields Hand in hand with her classmates Incessant laughter and smiles Mummy today Melissa and I played this new game it was so fun Day after day story after story A little more elongated Changing room gossip And so, he asked me out and a group of girls squeal No roses in her locker Sigh I don't care I'm young Kiss smooch Dance at prom with friends Social media she reads Internet forums she finds It all falls into place Tears on her duvet cover Frequent mask at school Look in disgust Observes those surrounding her I wish she tells herself Screams at God questions Chemicals they soothe Chemicals an addiction My skin it burns Feels better than the pain The pain of its natural state. What do you think of the poem and it's message? Could the message have been portrayed in a more understandable way? The start of the poem is her when she is younger and naive. Boys are not interested in her, she pretends to not care but deep down inside it hurts her. It's a true story. She finds out on the internet the truth about society's views on beauty. 'It all falls into place' means she now understands why she never had roses in her locker. Edited new version: She runs free on the fields Hand in hand with her classmates Incessant laughter and smiles Mummy today Melissa and I played this new game it was so fun Day after day story after story A little more elongated Changing room gossip And so, he asked me out and a group of girls squeal No roses in her locker Lock of lips in the distance Prom with friends in hand Social media she reads Internet forums she finds It all falls into place Tears on her duvet cover Frequent mask at school Look in disgust Observes those surrounding her I wish she tells herself Screams at God questions Chemicals they soothe Chemicals an addiction My skin it burns Feels better than the pain The pain of its natural state. Ads |
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10-14-2012, 12:27 PM
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This poem is sad, painful and full of horror,
so, "yes" the message is good and clear. She, your friend must have faith in who and what she is. This climax of confrontation with herself, has to give way to the beauty she has to offer as herself, not as someone else. I wish you and her well...) Ads |
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